Hi Math is Everyone and Fall Writing Frenzy Friends,
Happy Veterans Day! I hope you get a chance to honor the veterans in your life, those who have passed away, and their friends and family who have also sacrificed. Sending a big thank you to all how have or are currently serving!
This is the first week of analyzing the Fall Writing Frenzy winners’ work from 2020!
Every week, I will try my best to share 5-8 pieces from the Fall Writing Frenzy Winners that have something similar—a theme, if you will. (**Figurative gold star if you get the theme in your comment 😉 **)
Please use the comments to share what you think is working for the pieces and why, and you can even share what you think can be improved if you notice anything.
Then you can respond to each other’s comments, and of course, come back to the blog on Fridays for interviews and giveaways!
Please make sure to be constructive. We want to learn and grow together in a safe environment.
For example, if you think a piece was rambling (something I often do lol) please don’t say, “They’re rambling forever, can’t they just stop?” Try, “It seems to be a bit on the wordy side, maybe consider cutting out certain parts.”
Thanks for joining in the conversation!
Now off we go!
Fall Writing Frenzy Winner Pieces to Analyze
Before I share the first piece, I have to share how Liz’s piece inspired me:
Skeleton’s Change of Heart -(sung to the tune of the Pina Colada song)
By Liz Kehrli
I was tired of my old life
Been scaring kids for so long.
Too much screaming and crying
I knew that something was wrong.
So I’m throwing a party
But without any fear.
If you choose to cross over
Grab a mask and come here.
If you like bobbing for apples
On a dark, stormy night.
If you’d rather eat candy
Than cause terror and fright.
If you like dancing in the moonlight
With a cool autumn breeze.
Help me convince these young humans
That we are now here to please.
I can guess what you’re thinking
Why should I change how I live?
I’m so tired of taking,
I’ve learned it’s more fun to give.
So fill your glass and come party
And do not think that I’m daft.
I’m just very committed
To change each scream to a laugh!
If you like carving a pumpkin
And trick or treating ‘round town.
If you’re fed up with scaring
And you are heaven bound.
If you like playing until midnight
and singing the Monster Mash.
You are welcome to join me
Before our bones turn to ash!
A RED LEGEND
by Carrie Karnes-Fannin
a new moon
in an ancient
a red shadow
of a girl,
spread her hood
with a wolf’s silence
through the forest
her dark hair
a shining tangle
“We don’t have to.”
Lupe was right—
as they held
round the sky.
was still a
in the scarlet
as Lupe leapt to
“What will you do?”
of her village’s words
biting and cutting
“I will keep
the boy offered.
though a hunter,
“Thank you, friend,”
borrowing bravery from
“But there’s no secret here.”
They walked homeward,
A crowd gathered, but
no words were said,
shining like the full
that would become
CINDERFELLA THE SCULPTOR
by Dana Miroballi
Once upon a time in a kingdom by the sea, there lived a builder named Sinclair. Because Sinclair crafted cinder blocks, everyone called him Cinderfella. But what they didn’t know, was that Sinclair was also a sculptor. He tried adding artistry to the buildings, but his creativity was always struck down. So, Sinclair sculpted in secret.
One day, the princess announced a competition. Sinclair wanted to enter, but the artists laughed. “Stick to building, Cinderfella. Leave the art to us.” Sinclair sat amongst his sculptures and cried. As his tears mixed with cement dust, a fairy appeared. She transformed Sinclair’s hard hat and overalls into a cap and smock. A diamond chisel was in the pocket. “Create,” said the fairy. “But be back before midnight.”
Spectators gathered as Sinclair’s sculpture took shape. Just as Sinclair finished, the clock struck midnight. Sinclair dashed away, dropping his chisel. The princess searched every studio for the owner of the chisel, but no artist wielded it just right. Then Sinclair stepped out from the shadows. “I believe you’re looking for me,” he said. Sinclair took the chisel and transformed a boulder before the princess’s eyes. From that moment on, Sinclair created happily ever after.
Cry Wolf: Poem for Two Voices
By Janie Reinart
Each person reads a column in this performance piece. Lines said at the same time are written on the same line in both columns. A blank space in the column—reader remains silent.
Sun’s almost down.
Shadows lurk on the edge of night.
The hair on my neck stands up!
OWWW! I run!
I am coming for you. It’s coming.
I smell your fear.
I break branches. I break down.
I will win this race!
It’s getting closer!
I run…faster! I run.
Full moon! Full moon shining!
What’s happening to me?
The hair on my neck stands up. The hair on my neck stands up.
I see you. I see you in the dark.
We lurk like
on the edge of night. on the edge of night.
We run… We run… faster!
OWWW! OWWW! OWWW!
We are coming… for you! We are coming… run!
Calling in the night!
Calling in the night! OWWW!
NO BONES ABOUT IT
By Laurie Carmody
Are you bummed about having no bum?
Is the “No Shirt, No Skin, No Service” policy at fine establishments
throwing a wrench in your metatarsals?
Are you sick and tired of having no body to love?
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I can’t wait to get this discussion underway about what we can learn from these creators and their pieces! I’m excited to read all your comments and your interactions with each other! Don’t forget to share what you think the theme is!
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Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez
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