Hi Math is Everyone and Fall Writing Frenzy Friends,
This is the fifth week (if you can believe it!) of analyzing the Fall Writing Frenzy winners’ work from 2020! Wasn’t last week awesome? I finally stumped EVERYONE on my theme–score one Kaitlyn; however, all your theme ideas were even COOLER than mine, so point analyzers too! If you missed it, week 4 analysis check it out here!
Every week I will try my best to share 5-8 pieces from the Fall Writing Frenzy Winners that have something similar, a theme, if you will. (Figurative gold star if you get the theme in your comment ;))
Please use the comments to share what you think is working for the pieces and why, and you even what you think can be improved if you notice anything. Then you can respond to each other’s comments and of course come back to the blog on Fridays for interviews and giveaways!
Please make sure to be constructive.
We want to learn and grow together in a safe environment.
example, if you think a piece was rambling (something I often do lol) please don’t say, “They’re rambling forever, can’t they just stop?” Try, “It seems to be a bit on the wordy side, maybe consider cutting out certain parts.”
Thanks for joining in the conversation!
Now off we go!
The Meadow of Spirits Unknown
By Danielle Sharkan
Far from the torment and anguish at home,
she flees to the Meadow of Spirits Unknown.
Alone with her thoughts, she begins the great task,
of healing the world from the wounds of its past.
She leaps and she twirls as the Autumn sun sets,
and cleanses her heart from its tears and regrets.
Spiderwebs, lizard legs, tail of shrew,
she gathers each item for witches’ dark brew,
With a cackle, a sizzle, a whistle and swish,
she blends and she stirs and she beats in her wish.
To strengthen the ailing, enrich all the poor,
to feed all the hungry, solve conflicts and war.
Stop forests from burning, and clean tainted seas,
be kind to each other, set troubled souls free.
Come gather ye spirits, and powers that be.
Let’s beg for redemption this All Hallows’ Eve.
The Wonders of the Leaves
by Shannon Howarth Nelsen
Cool air gusting
Leaves adorn the ground
Laughing in the mound
Treasures join the heap
Plumping up for sleep
Insects for a feast
Leaves are chomped and pieced
Turning leaves to mold
New will grow from old
Food and sheltered space
Safe within a case (Art – caterpillar moth cocoons)
Field mice finding
For a winter’s nest
Wood frogs huddle
Snuggled for a rest
Seeds are carried
Leaves will sprout anew
Life is teeming
In the golden hue
By Amber Hendricks
Fall begins anew.
Change in every hue.
Falling day by day.
Winter’s on its way.
An Autumn Daydream
By Kelly Zhang
At the end of a long tiresome day,
I step onto the porch to take a deep breath.
An impish autumn breeze tickles my cheeks
and lulls me into a trance …
Rowing a boat under the azure sky,
I forget to which port I’m headed.
The undulating hills of red and gold
Bewitch my eyes.
Why do such passionate shades burst upon
A scene of withering solitude?
I anchor the boat,
and dive into a forest,
the color of toasty campfires
and glowy sunsets.
As night falls,
I sit under a velvety canopy of stars
And watch light dance through the window
Of a little wood cabin.
An owl beckons in the distance.
The trees respond.
Slowly, I drift off to sleep
under the hypnosis of the Fall Serenade.
SCREEECH! The sound of tires grinding pavement
Broke the spell.
Like magic that wore off at the stroke of Midnight.
I looked around, dazed, confused.
A single leaf drifted past my shoulder, the color of burning dreams.
Needle, the Evergreen
By Dazzle Ng
“Dear, you might turn blue!”
said a tree
nearby the pine.
“Don’t mind me. I’m changing!”
in the breeze.
for the magic
young and old.
Sigh. “C’mon wind!”
But her leaves held.
Not a speckle
But the season
Will Needle accept her fate?
… and glass?
On the most joyous
day of winter.
I can’t wait to get this discussion underway about what we can learn from these creators and their pieces!
Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez
PS. I can’t wait for our Kidlit Dance Party this weekend, who’s coming??
PPS I want to challenge you talented analyzers to comment on my tweet for the Picture Books I Like post and tag twitter as many creators from the list as you can! A tall order but if each person tags one or two, we can tag them all in no time!